Sunday, November 12, 2006

inspiration comes at odd moments

So, the following children's short story is inspired by a fellow livejournaler's post (jadis).

Take note, this was all very rushed, no editing, no proofreading, just all creative barf.
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Weeeoooohh weeeeoooohhh. Tina looked up from her book and stared out the window. A fire truck! She watched through the foggy glass as the red pumper zoomed by. She watched it as far as she could, and then rested her forehead on the cold pane. The rain outside had finally stopped, but it was still too wet outside to go play. Mother had sat her in the den with Charlotte's Web, but Tina had read it before, and knew that the humble pig would not be eaten. She flopped back into her grandfather's cushy armchair and resumed her reading. She had only turned the page when she heard it again.

Weeeeeeoooohhhhh. Weeeeeeoooohhh. Tina leapt to the window just in time to see a red ladder truck whizz down Coxwell towards O'Connor, probably hot on the heels of the pumper. The red and white lights flashed dizzily as it turned the corner. Tina pressed her face against the window. Mother would scold later when she discovered the face prints on the glass. The truck was gone. Tina frowned and clambered back into Grandfather's chair. She opened Charlotte's Web and continued. She had only skimmed the next paragraph when she heard it AGAIN!

Weeeeeeooohhhh. Weeeeeeeeeeeeoooooohhhhhhh. Tina sprang from the armchair and plastered her face to the smudgy window in time to see a red tanker truck fly towards the intersection. And look! Another pumper was close behind! The lights flashed, the sirens wailed, and following them was another ladder! Tina squinted! Could it be the SAME truck as before? She was sure that she had seen the fireman with the big nose on the first pumper! And look! The fireman hanging out the window of the ladder was on the first one, wasn't he? Quickly, Tina looked back down the street, and sure enough, there was a tanker! She looked left again. Where had the first tanker gone?

Tina sat back as the trucks raced around the corner. Maybe the firemen were racing! They were circling the block! They were trying to see who was fastest! Tina gazed out the window, waiting. Charlotte's Web lay, unnoticed, on the floor. And then Tina saw the pumper come around the bend, and to her surprise, saw FOUR firemen in the back. She was sure that the first pumper had only had THREE men in the back. Tina frowned as they sped past. So, they WERE different trucks. That was number seven! There must be a big fire somewhere nearby! Tina leapt off of the chair and ran down the hall. She grabbed her yellow slicker, pulled on her red galoshes and yanked the front door open. The sun was just starting to peek out from behind the big cumulonimbus clouds.

"Tina! Where are you going?" Tina turned to see Mother standing in the kitchen entrance, hands on her hips, her apron covered in flour.

"Out! To see the fire trucks!" And Tina turned and jumped down the front steps. She watched in awe as yet another ladder truck came barrelling down the road. As it drove past, a jolly looking fireman in the back waved his hat at Tina. She smiled and turned left. She watched as it turned the corner onto O'Connor and then she took a deep breath. She ran as fast as she could to the corner, and just as she reached it, another tanker truck pulled up beside her.

"Where are you going little girl?" the driver called out to her.

"To see the big fire!" Tina stared up at the firemen, all looking quite happy, not at all how she imagined they would look on their way to the big fire.

"Hop aboard, and we'll take you there!" A hand reached down and Tina was pulled into the fire truck. "Hold on! We're almost there!"

The truck skidded around the corner and raced down the street. Tina held her breath as she saw the lights from all of the other trucks in the distance. They came up on them quickly, and Tina jumped down from the truck. The firemen jumped down as well, and ran over to the building that their fellow firemen had gathered around.

Bert's Ice Cream. Tina watched in amazement as the firemen hurried into the ice cream store and lined up. Then Tina saw the sign in the window. Free ice cream to the first fifty firemen. Tina grinned as she heard the sirens coming up behind her.

They had been racing. Racing for ice cream.

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Fin.
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Comments? Suggestions? Criticisms??? All are welcome.

1 Comments:

Blogger Rachel said...

This is absolutely friggin brilliant. You captured everything beautifully. I know only a handful of people who can write short fiction well. Now it is a handful....plus one Kat.



This is talent incarnate. Loved how you interspersed Charlotte's Web and the onomatopeia you used to sound the siren's blaring. Also, the demouement... sheer brilliance.... free ice cream?

whoda thunk it ?


still baffled at how GOOD this is !

submit it somewhere, duck!

10:16 p.m.

 

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